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Swordfairy
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HI! I'm a novice writer (13 yrs old-what'd you expect :D )
Here is a song I wrote. I know it's not that good, I just wanted some feedback.
Walking down a country road
Thinkin’ you’ve left everything behind
But your hound dog comes runnin’ after you makin’
Tears in your eyes leave you blind
(chorus)
You don’t know what I’ve been through
You don’t know what I am
You don’t see the world through my eyes
Though a strange place it’s always been
Ridin’ down a trail with a broken heart
Come to an intersection choose right or left to part
Your body seems to split in half
One half one way the other gone
And your horse seems to carry you down a straight path
(chorus)
You come to tree you carved your initials in
Right next to your lover’s
You feel dizzy your head seems to spin
As you realize he’s gone
You run home, tears streamin’ down your face
Like a little girl
But this time you ain’t dressed in a torn pink lace
(chorus)
You need a shoulder to cry on
To heave your sorrows out
Though you feel like bein’ left alone
Left alone to pout
And here he comes along to try and share your sorrow
But you slap him in the face today
Knowin’ you’ll regret it tomorrow
‘Cause broken hearts are like broken dreams
In which love can sew no seams
(chorus)
Here is a song I wrote. I know it's not that good, I just wanted some feedback.
Walking down a country road
Thinkin’ you’ve left everything behind
But your hound dog comes runnin’ after you makin’
Tears in your eyes leave you blind
(chorus)
You don’t know what I’ve been through
You don’t know what I am
You don’t see the world through my eyes
Though a strange place it’s always been
Ridin’ down a trail with a broken heart
Come to an intersection choose right or left to part
Your body seems to split in half
One half one way the other gone
And your horse seems to carry you down a straight path
(chorus)
You come to tree you carved your initials in
Right next to your lover’s
You feel dizzy your head seems to spin
As you realize he’s gone
You run home, tears streamin’ down your face
Like a little girl
But this time you ain’t dressed in a torn pink lace
(chorus)
You need a shoulder to cry on
To heave your sorrows out
Though you feel like bein’ left alone
Left alone to pout
And here he comes along to try and share your sorrow
But you slap him in the face today
Knowin’ you’ll regret it tomorrow
‘Cause broken hearts are like broken dreams
In which love can sew no seams
(chorus)